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The colors are bright
shiny bright
in the afternoon, nearly night
where the shadows are floating
along with the clothing
known as the colors

the trees are soothing
happy to feel the wind
to rest and see
the colors

the ground is shaking
dancing in the colors
and the shadows
and happy following
the passenger
of the ground

the sky is moving
moving with the clouds
moving along
dancing along
and the sight
becomes more than that
with the clouds
the sky
the ground
the trees
the shadows
and the colors.
Something I thought about after seeing [link] 's [link]
I think this may fit your tastes. Enjoy!
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:iconflakchen:
Flakchen Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011  Student Digital Artist
That's really really good~ :D i'm proud of you. :3
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.^^
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Flakchen Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Welcome ^^
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:icondarkmatery:
DarkMatery Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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liveoncedietwice Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I would like to include this poem in my book
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You may.
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RichardFeynman Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2011
Love it. I love the cadence and how it flows.
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.:)
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lcipher42 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2010  Professional General Artist
This sounds like what I get camping on acid. Well done!
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
"What I get camping on acid"? Thanks!:)
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lcipher42 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2010  Professional General Artist
You earned it, trust me.
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:?^^;...:iconspeechlessplz:
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lcipher42 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2010  Professional General Artist
Huh?
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Other than that, thank you.:D
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I don't get what you're saying.
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MariaTala Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2010
A beautiful poem and a wonderful use of the senses. :heart:
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!thanks for the llama too!
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AlecWolfe Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010
The short sentences makes this really easy to read and give it a nice flow. This is quite a cute piece, nice work.
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!:Dthat means a lot to me!:)
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AlecWolfe Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010
you're welcome.
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:):):la::la:
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AlecWolfe Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010
^.^
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:):)
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Obsidian-Nightfall Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010  Student Writer
I really like your description here, well done...
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
why, thank you Obsid!
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Obsidian-Nightfall Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010  Student Writer
My pleasure :)
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:):)
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ak21626 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the flow of this poem.
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!And thank you for the Fav!
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Cibbwin Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
This is fascinating. Like some phenomena that the whole world stops to watch.

I rather like your odd rhythm, and your repetition of colors is perfect - not at all overdone!
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!That means a lot to me!
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ohara1901 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful poem, :heart:
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DarkMatery Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!
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